EG11 Freshman Computer Composition
Peer Review
Title
of Essay: Position Essay #1
Author's
Name: Andrew Gensinger
Reviewer's
Name: Renee Powers-Ficarra
1.
What did you like best about this essay?
Extremely informative, full of information on examples of computers.
2. How
interesting is the introduction? Does it make you want to continue to read the
paper? Why or why not?
It makes you want to read on to see what he is implying about computers on a" smaller scale".
3.
What is the thesis statement? Does the author need to make the thesis clearer?
Thesis: Computers have changed people's lives to some extent, but you have to look at them on a much larger scale.
4.
Where in the essay could the author better develop his/her ideas by using
examples, comparison-contrast, or cause and effect?
Well developed, no need for change.
5. Is
each paragraph in the essay unified? Or do some of the paragraphs contain
irrelevant sentences or words that need to be omitted?
Unified, well-composed essay.
6.
What paragraphs in the draft, if any, do not support the thesis and need to be
omitted?
All appeared to be relevant.
7. Is
there a place in the essay where the writing confused you? How can the author
better clarify his/her thoughts?
No, it was well written.
8. How
clear is the purpose of the essay? How well has the author met the needs of
his/her audience?
Very
clear- offers many facts and examples of changes computers have made.
9. How
effective is the ending? Is the essay ended in such a way that you know it is
the end?
Ending is well stated, summarizes results of computers influencing the lives of people
10.
What did the author do extremely well?
Delivered and informative essay
11.
What could the author do better next time?
Spell check, for example: "durastically"
12. Has the author made all the arguments for this assignment?
Yes. Position clearly stated that computers have affected our lives