EG11 Freshman Computer Composition
Peer Review
Title
of Essay: Position Essay#2
Author's Name: Andrew Gensinger
Reviewer's
Name: Renee Powers-Ficarra
1.
What did you like best about this essay?
It was very realistic regarding the issue of computers in today's society.
2. How
interesting is the introduction? Does it make you want to continue to read the
paper? Why or why not?
It lacked a "catchy" beginning in the first paragraph
3.
What is the thesis statement? Does the author need to make the thesis clearer?
Intro should have incorporated one about "Computer Age"
4.
Where in the essay could the author better develop his/her ideas by using
examples, comparison-contrast, or cause and effect?
Ideas were effectively developed through out.
5. Is
each paragraph in the essay unified? Or do some of the paragraphs contain
irrelevant sentences or words that need to be omitted?
First paragraph could have introduced main idea of essay.
6.
What paragraphs in the draft, if any, do not support the thesis and need to be
omitted?
See answer to #5
7. Is
there a place in the essay where the writing confused you? How can the author
better clarify his/her thoughts?
Not applicable
8. How
clear is the purpose of the essay? How well has the author met the needs of
his/her audience?
See answer to #12
9. How
effective is the ending? Is the essay ended in such a way that you know it is
the end?
Effectively gives suggestions of ways to be part of the "Computer Age"
10.
What did the author do extremely well?
Makes
valid points regarding computer literacy
11.
What could the author do better next time?
See Answer #5
12.
Has the author made all the arguments for this assignment?
Position on computer literacy is effectively relayed to the reader